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Shadows on the bed
myloverhasfur
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08-07-2015, 11:07 PM

I feel like the third verse could do with one more line (maybe repeat the last line? not sure).  Another verse before the last could work well, I think.

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Shadows on the bed - by silverwolf1 - 08-07-2015, 10:45 PM
Shadows on the bed - by myloverhasfur - 08-07-2015, 11:07 PM
Shadows on the bed - by silverwolf1 - 08-08-2015, 07:43 PM

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