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Alpha Endari Husky
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09-07-2021, 12:41 AM


The mechanics of it (spelling, punctuation, etc.) look pretty good, except for the first half of it all being centered for no reason I can think of. I spotted only one error: 4th paragraph, 4th line down, you have "Bone's team" which should be "Bones' team". Also, it should be "CAPTAIN'S LOG".




I'll leave it to others to comment on the content.


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Alpha Endari Husky - by QuantumHusky - 09-06-2021, 06:09 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-06-2021, 12:32 PM
Alpha Endari Husky - by QuantumHusky - 09-06-2021, 10:31 PM
Alpha Endari Husky - by threelegs - 09-07-2021, 12:41 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-07-2021, 03:31 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by QuantumHusky - 09-07-2021, 03:35 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-07-2021, 11:51 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by QuantumHusky - 09-12-2021, 03:33 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-12-2021, 04:25 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by QuantumHusky - 09-16-2021, 01:28 AM
Alpha Endari Husky - by threelegs - 09-16-2021, 06:34 PM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-16-2021, 09:00 PM
Alpha Endari Husky - by heavyhorse - 09-23-2021, 03:33 PM

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